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Pinkie Pie knelt down in front of a small gray stone. This stone was covered with variously colored streamers and had some oddly shaped balloons tied to it. She nudged forward a small box covered in green wrapping paper and tied together with a brilliant pink bow.

"Happy birthday, Grandma Pie. It's...been a year since I saw you last, huh?" She blushed. "I kept meaning to visit more often, like, during Christmas, but... Well, I've been getting closer to this new pony, Twilight. She's really not much of a people person, and was having her first Christmas here. So, I helped make sure she didn't spend it alone. Like you taught me."

She scuffed at the ground with her front hoof, eyes downcast. "I... I usually have something to say. You know? I mean, I'm still talking, but I usually...talk faster. ...is Heaven nice? Are you and Grandpa having a good time?" She smiled. "You're probably playing a prank on the others up there right now, aren't you?"

"...listen. Remember Rainbow Dash? That awesome flying pony? Well...she and I are dating now." She blushed. "You never made me feel like a freak about that. So, I thought you should be the first to know."

She leaned forward and kissed it gently. "Happy Birthday. I love you, Gran'ma."
Pinkie Pie celebrates a relative's birthday.

A My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic fanfiction
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:iconlordmardok:
LordMardok Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011
this evokes manly tears. I love it. It's awesome.
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BrotherPrickle Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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:iconvanillabeandandylion:
I'm not crying :tears:... Just sweating from the eyes.
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Auraion Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2011
"...listen. Remember Rainbow Dash? That awesome flying pony? Well...she and I are dating now."

That gets me every time
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BrotherPrickle Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Heh, thanks.
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WaterDeity3 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2011
This is really sweet. By the way, it still says "Grandman" at the beginning.
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BrotherPrickle Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Oh. I didn't see that. Thank you.
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buzz1170 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2011
Second paragraph should say grandma, not grandman.

I think it would be better if you slowly revealed at the end that she was talking to her dead grandma, like at the beginning imply that she was just visiting her at her house but at the end reveal she's at her gravestone.
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BrotherPrickle Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Fixed it. I meant it to say Gran'ma.

And perhaps. But I got some positive feedback for the original version, so I decided to keep it close to the original. Thank you for the critique, though!
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